atariel lossehelin

Oh my lol. We need more information about the person; make us care who they are. And why were they captured? Who were they running from? It doesn't quite make ...

OK PEOPLE!!! PLEASE! Can I say to mr purple balloon or whomever, no offense, but lighten up?! Good lord. I thought the dizziness of the people the princess was explaining ...

Okeydokers. My aunt would KILL you for your use of block formatting... lol. Some of your sentance structures could use some work, but it's good. Any PARTICULAR reason you used ...

I agree with the person who said you should use words like "ain't" and such, it would make it even more amusing than it is. And good gosh I wish ...

OMG! This poem was SO you lol. Much, much better than the one you did with... well I have an idea of what 7-year-old you were writing with lol. However, ...

*sigh* Elle darling, you really could have done better... However, your (first??) rather interesting attempt at writing a poem with a 7-year-old did not make me want to scream and ...

the way some of the lines were formed kind of left the poem without flow. The part where you said "And a change in thought Will have things popping Too." ...

I actually think the ending is good, I liked its abruptness; I didn't think it was that abrupt anyway. It's true, some more imagery would be good, but that would ...

Ok so hi... I am the author of this poem... so I'm making my appearance lol. First and foremost, I would like to thank each and every one of you ...